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  • kommisar
    Dark Chancellor
    FFR Simfile Author
    FFR Music Producer
    • Jun 2005
    • 7324

    #406
    Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

    chopinnnnnnnn



    also judges don't like wap stuff better. in fact rebirth has rejected stuff for being too animu just cuz

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    • SKG_Scintill
      Spun a twirly fruitcake,
      FFR Simfile Author
      • Feb 2009
      • 3875

      #407
      Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

      Originally posted by Patashu
      it's not called 'castle of the guy' it's called 'monty on the run'

      ****ers
      Au contraire, Monty on the Run's tune is a lot longer than this, so instead of cutting the long version I took the one that was already cut, i.e. the one of castle of the guy





      Originally posted by bluguerilla
      So Sexy Robotnik (SKG_Scintill) {.0001/10} [--]
      ___
      . RHYTHMS PR LAYERING
      . ZOMG I HAD TO QUIT OUT TERRIBLE
      .

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      • ninzaburo
        FFR Player
        • Nov 2007
        • 48

        #408
        Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

        Originally posted by kommisar
        ninzaburo wtfffffffff was that hahaha
        Lol, she sings Chaosmaid.

        ps im rin-dude
        What, How may accounts do you have?
        一期一会

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        • Choofers
          FFR Player
          FFR Music Producer
          • Dec 2008
          • 6205

          #409
          Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

          Wait about three days. I'll have a file (maybe)

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          • kommisar
            Dark Chancellor
            FFR Simfile Author
            FFR Music Producer
            • Jun 2005
            • 7324

            #410
            Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

            Originally posted by ninzaburo
            Lol, she sings Chaosmaid.



            What, How may accounts do you have?
            kommisar
            kommisar[os]
            rin-dude
            arsenic-5150-



            that's all i can remember. and i had access to dimentio for a bit

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            • xferrarix
              FFR Player
              • Mar 2009
              • 1091

              #411
              Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

              i finished something for this.. need testers (meaning people who are actually knowledgeable in simfile making, not random nubs) many questionable parts to me so i need some help nailin them out

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              • icontrolyourworld
                Enjoy life!
                FFR Simfile Author
                • Oct 2007
                • 4192

                #412
                Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                Originally posted by icontrolyourworld
                Gundam and/or Kommisar, can you help me with my technical errors please?

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                • Gundam-Dude
                  `~`
                  FFR Simfile Author
                  • Oct 2005
                  • 7327

                  #413
                  Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                  (Icyworld) Hurry Somebody Up
                  - Very first note, you can emphasize it with a hand rather than a jump.
                  - Measure 3, right after the down jack, make those two notes hands.
                  - Measure 4, 2nd 4th note should be a hand.
                  - Measure 4, 4th 4th note should be a hand.
                  - Measure 5, 2nd 4th note should be a hand.
                  - After Measure 5, you're layering jumps to the guitar. Personally, I'd layer the percussion (every other 8th note should be a jump) and layer the guitar as holds. Your layering makes it feel empty and underlayered.
                  - Measure 7, 64th/192nd mini-freezes can be applied to the [34] jump. [13] 4th jump following afterwards can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes. Personally, a jump with mini-freezes would fit better because using hands are rather too intense for that particular noise.
                  - Measure 8, [12] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                  - Measure 8.75 (4th note) you missed a jump. Jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                  - Measure 9, you should've layered the percussion. 16th jack would fit nicely. [12] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                  - Measure 10, [34] 8th jump should be a jump with 64th/192nd mini-freezes. [34] 8th jump following afterwards can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                  - Measure 12, the [34][12] jumps should be jumps with 64th/192nd mini-freezes.
                  - Measure 13, the beginning of your second jack starts late. It should actually begin right on this measure. [24] jump following afterwards should be a hand.
                  - Measure 14, [3] hold should be a hand.
                  - Measure 15, [24] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                  - Measure 16, [34] 4th jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes. Directly afterwards, part is rather empty. Right before the [12] hold should be a 16th note. Judging from how you layered directly afterwards, it seems better to connect the two with a 4th note to keep the flow.
                  - The [12], two [24] 8th jumps AND [14] 4th jump can be hands or jumps with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                  - Measure 18, [14] jump should be a hand.
                  - Measure 19, [34] jump should be a hand. Directly afterwards, I don't know why you didn't layer the descending [4321] pattern with long holds. You seemed to have missed that completely.
                  - Measure 20, the [34] jumps can be hands or jumps with mini-freezes. There's an inconsistency with how you layered because the first two are mini-rolls while the other two are 32nd jacks. I don't know what you were trying to do there. Also why is the first set of mini-rolls 32nds while the second set 48ths? It's the exact same sound being played.
                  - Measure 21, You screwed up the minijack layering. Lower the rate and turn on assist tick and you'll figure out how to properly layer it. Also you missed the long percussion jacks. Following [34] jump should be a hand.
                  - Measure 23, 2nd [14] jump should be a hand.
                  - Measure 24, [12] jump can be a hand.
                  - Measure 25, [3] 4th note should be a hand. [12] 8th jump following should be a jump with 64th/192nd mini-freezes.
                  - Measure 27, [13] 4th jump should be a hand.
                  - Measure 28, [34] 4th jump should be a hand.
                  - Measure 29, [14] 4th jump should be a hand. Also a long hold to layer the guitar note being held. [3] 8th note following afterwards should be a hand.
                  - Measure 30, [34] 4th jump should be a hand. Also a long hold to layer the guitar note being held. [34][12] jumps following afterwards should be hands. Also long holds to layer the guitar note being held.
                  - Last 4 notes aren't pitch relevant. They should be descending rather than ascending. So rather than [1][3][1][4], you should perhaps mirror it and do [4][1][3][1] instead (This is just an example. Anything would be fine as long as it's descending.).


                  Overall, you underlayered. Noticed an inconsistency from Measures 1-13 where you layer the guitar with jumps and afterwards you start layering them with long holds. It'd be better to work in those holds for the first 13 measures for the guitar. For this song in particular, it'd be better to layer the percussion with jumps (a jump every other 8th note). Hands for cymbal crashes and intense/dominant sounds. Mini-freezes to accent particular sounds such as the bells where 64th/192nd mini-freezes would do justice.

                  Rejected. Fix up the above and I might lightly accept.


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                  • WTFBrandon
                    Shout out to Hades
                    • Mar 2007
                    • 1387

                    #414
                    Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                    Originally posted by Gundam-Dude
                    (Icyworld) Hurry Somebody Up
                    - Very first note, you can emphasize it with a hand rather than a jump.
                    - Measure 3, right after the down jack, make those two notes hands.
                    - Measure 4, 2nd 4th note should be a hand.
                    - Measure 4, 4th 4th note should be a hand.
                    - Measure 5, 2nd 4th note should be a hand.
                    - After Measure 5, you're layering jumps to the guitar. Personally, I'd layer the percussion (every other 8th note should be a jump) and layer the guitar as holds. Your layering makes it feel empty and underlayered.
                    - Measure 7, 64th/192nd mini-freezes can be applied to the [34] jump. [13] 4th jump following afterwards can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes. Personally, a jump with mini-freezes would fit better because using hands are rather too intense for that particular noise.
                    - Measure 8, [12] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                    - Measure 8.75 (4th note) you missed a jump. Jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                    - Measure 9, you should've layered the percussion. 16th jack would fit nicely. [12] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                    - Measure 10, [34] 8th jump should be a jump with 64th/192nd mini-freezes. [34] 8th jump following afterwards can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                    - Measure 12, the [34][12] jumps should be jumps with 64th/192nd mini-freezes.
                    - Measure 13, the beginning of your second jack starts late. It should actually begin right on this measure. [24] jump following afterwards should be a hand.
                    - Measure 14, [3] hold should be a hand.
                    - Measure 15, [24] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                    - Measure 16, [34] 4th jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes. Directly afterwards, part is rather empty. Right before the [12] hold should be a 16th note. Judging from how you layered directly afterwards, it seems better to connect the two with a 4th note to keep the flow.
                    - The [12], two [24] 8th jumps AND [14] 4th jump can be hands or jumps with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                    - Measure 18, [14] jump should be a hand.
                    - Measure 19, [34] jump should be a hand. Directly afterwards, I don't know why you didn't layer the descending [4321] pattern with long holds. You seemed to have missed that completely.
                    - Measure 20, the [34] jumps can be hands or jumps with mini-freezes. There's an inconsistency with how you layered because the first two are mini-rolls while the other two are 32nd jacks. I don't know what you were trying to do there. Also why is the first set of mini-rolls 32nds while the second set 48ths? It's the exact same sound being played.
                    - Measure 21, You screwed up the minijack layering. Lower the rate and turn on assist tick and you'll figure out how to properly layer it. Also you missed the long percussion jacks. Following [34] jump should be a hand.
                    - Measure 23, 2nd [14] jump should be a hand.
                    - Measure 24, [12] jump can be a hand.
                    - Measure 25, [3] 4th note should be a hand. [12] 8th jump following should be a jump with 64th/192nd mini-freezes.
                    - Measure 27, [13] 4th jump should be a hand.
                    - Measure 28, [34] 4th jump should be a hand.
                    - Measure 29, [14] 4th jump should be a hand. Also a long hold to layer the guitar note being held. [3] 8th note following afterwards should be a hand.
                    - Measure 30, [34] 4th jump should be a hand. Also a long hold to layer the guitar note being held. [34][12] jumps following afterwards should be hands. Also long holds to layer the guitar note being held.
                    - Last 4 notes aren't pitch relevant. They should be descending rather than ascending. So rather than [1][3][1][4], you should perhaps mirror it and do [4][1][3][1] instead (This is just an example. Anything would be fine as long as it's descending.).


                    Overall, you underlayered. Noticed an inconsistency from Measures 1-13 where you layer the guitar with jumps and afterwards you start layering them with long holds. It'd be better to work in those holds for the first 13 measures for the guitar. For this song in particular, it'd be better to layer the percussion with jumps (a jump every other 8th note). Hands for cymbal crashes and intense/dominant sounds. Mini-freezes to accent particular sounds such as the bells where 64th/192nd mini-freezes would do justice.

                    Rejected. Fix up the above and I might lightly accept.
                    I love you cutiepie <3
                    I think what you ment to say was fix the whole thing.
                    Sums up everything into one small sentence. :3
                    Last edited by WTFBrandon; 11-12-2009, 05:12 PM.
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                    • N.T.M.
                      FFR Player
                      • Dec 2007
                      • 890

                      #415
                      Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                      Dayamn, GD doesn't half-ass his ****.
                      “Beware the irrational, however seductive. Shun the 'transcendent' and all who invite you to subordinate or annihilate yourself. Distrust compassion; prefer dignity for yourself and others. Don't be afraid to be thought arrogant or selfish... Suspect your own motives, and all excuses. Do not live for others any more than you would expect others to live for you.”

                      Christopher Hitchens

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                      • Gundam-Dude
                        `~`
                        FFR Simfile Author
                        • Oct 2005
                        • 7327

                        #416
                        Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                        In-depth reviews take too much time which is why I usually do quick overviews, rofl.


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                        • dood gone krazee
                          RATOOOOOOOOO
                          FFR Simfile Author
                          • May 2007
                          • 1939

                          #417
                          Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                          Uhhhh did Eulogy ever get reviewed? I don't remember. D:
                          -4th Official Tournament Expert Divison Champion-

                          Originally posted by Sir_Thomas
                          Dood... you done gone got yourself krazee.
                          Originally posted by robertsona
                          I hear back in 12 AD Jesus Himself sent an FGO to Tass and it got a 9 by JX

                          "[++] 9/10
                          Very good file but not japanese enough ps hi jesus"

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                          • icontrolyourworld
                            Enjoy life!
                            FFR Simfile Author
                            • Oct 2007
                            • 4192

                            #418
                            Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                            Wow, that's quite an in depth review, thank you so much gundam dude!

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                            • i love you
                              Live a wonderful life~
                              FFR Simfile Author
                              • Oct 2006
                              • 7313

                              #419
                              Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                              Originally posted by Gundam-Dude
                              (Icyworld) Hurry Somebody Up
                              - Very first note, you can emphasize it with a hand rather than a jump.
                              - Measure 3, right after the down jack, make those two notes hands.
                              - Measure 4, 2nd 4th note should be a hand.
                              - Measure 4, 4th 4th note should be a hand.
                              - Measure 5, 2nd 4th note should be a hand.
                              - After Measure 5, you're layering jumps to the guitar. Personally, I'd layer the percussion (every other 8th note should be a jump) and layer the guitar as holds. Your layering makes it feel empty and underlayered.
                              - Measure 7, 64th/192nd mini-freezes can be applied to the [34] jump. [13] 4th jump following afterwards can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes. Personally, a jump with mini-freezes would fit better because using hands are rather too intense for that particular noise.
                              - Measure 8, [12] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                              - Measure 8.75 (4th note) you missed a jump. Jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                              - Measure 9, you should've layered the percussion. 16th jack would fit nicely. [12] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                              - Measure 10, [34] 8th jump should be a jump with 64th/192nd mini-freezes. [34] 8th jump following afterwards can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                              - Measure 12, the [34][12] jumps should be jumps with 64th/192nd mini-freezes.
                              - Measure 13, the beginning of your second jack starts late. It should actually begin right on this measure. [24] jump following afterwards should be a hand.
                              - Measure 14, [3] hold should be a hand.
                              - Measure 15, [24] jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                              - Measure 16, [34] 4th jump can be a hand or jump with mini-freezes. Directly afterwards, part is rather empty. Right before the [12] hold should be a 16th note. Judging from how you layered directly afterwards, it seems better to connect the two with a 4th note to keep the flow.
                              - The [12], two [24] 8th jumps AND [14] 4th jump can be hands or jumps with mini-freezes, pending on the sound intensity.
                              - Measure 18, [14] jump should be a hand.
                              - Measure 19, [34] jump should be a hand. Directly afterwards, I don't know why you didn't layer the descending [4321] pattern with long holds. You seemed to have missed that completely.
                              - Measure 20, the [34] jumps can be hands or jumps with mini-freezes. There's an inconsistency with how you layered because the first two are mini-rolls while the other two are 32nd jacks. I don't know what you were trying to do there. Also why is the first set of mini-rolls 32nds while the second set 48ths? It's the exact same sound being played.
                              - Measure 21, You screwed up the minijack layering. Lower the rate and turn on assist tick and you'll figure out how to properly layer it. Also you missed the long percussion jacks. Following [34] jump should be a hand.
                              - Measure 23, 2nd [14] jump should be a hand.
                              - Measure 24, [12] jump can be a hand.
                              - Measure 25, [3] 4th note should be a hand. [12] 8th jump following should be a jump with 64th/192nd mini-freezes.
                              - Measure 27, [13] 4th jump should be a hand.
                              - Measure 28, [34] 4th jump should be a hand.
                              - Measure 29, [14] 4th jump should be a hand. Also a long hold to layer the guitar note being held. [3] 8th note following afterwards should be a hand.
                              - Measure 30, [34] 4th jump should be a hand. Also a long hold to layer the guitar note being held. [34][12] jumps following afterwards should be hands. Also long holds to layer the guitar note being held.
                              - Last 4 notes aren't pitch relevant. They should be descending rather than ascending. So rather than [1][3][1][4], you should perhaps mirror it and do [4][1][3][1] instead (This is just an example. Anything would be fine as long as it's descending.).


                              Overall, you underlayered. Noticed an inconsistency from Measures 1-13 where you layer the guitar with jumps and afterwards you start layering them with long holds. It'd be better to work in those holds for the first 13 measures for the guitar. For this song in particular, it'd be better to layer the percussion with jumps (a jump every other 8th note). Hands for cymbal crashes and intense/dominant sounds. Mini-freezes to accent particular sounds such as the bells where 64th/192nd mini-freezes would do justice.

                              Rejected. Fix up the above and I might lightly accept.
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                              • samurai7694
                                바보
                                FFR Simfile Author
                                • Aug 2008
                                • 4639

                                #420
                                Re: Xoon 5: The Transition Submissions Open

                                Oh dear... :O

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