well, I admit, I'm not a great writer...
The essay is not complete, the conclusion is not complete, it is only a rough draft.
so I'll the flashflash community to proof read my essay
Any comments are welcome (please don't take this too literally)
Any Opinions against or for this topic is also welcome ^.^
the prompt: your view on america
topic: America is not focusing on ourselves therefore starving america of the resources it needs to stay powerful.
title: starving america
To be American is to be powerful, to be free, but also poor? Americans fail to address the problems inside our country, the starving the children, the homeless, the illiterate all need the attention that is spend in other countries. America, the most powerful country in the world, is not focusing the foundation of its glorious power, the American people. We have organizations for Uganda and slave labor in third world countries but what of the needy in our country? They are stuck in the streets and are growing in number annually. America needs to come to its senses; we must invest our time and effort not in the outrageous and pointless wars over in Iraq or problems in other countries but in how we organize and help ourselves.
The first sign that our time and effort was being misplaced was when Americans first realized that their pockets were being emptied. Where do the funds for the machinery, the weapons ,and the soldiers come from? That’s right, from those pockets emptied. As a result the entire nation suffers. Funds from education are sucked dry. Teachers, schools, and students are deprived of adequate learning materials and resources. As shown in a 20/20 episode, Stupid America, schools are not delivering results and other countries, even third world countries, are outstripping Americans in academic achievement. The rationale of going to Iraq was to search for weapons of mass destruction. As it turns out, we brought more weapons into their country and more deaths to Americans and Iraqis alike. America, stop sucking our pockets dry to plant flowers in Iraq and give our people the education we deserve.
Many Americans fail to realize the amount of poverty that occurs in our country. Too often people recognize America as the super country of the world, a perfect nation in terms of opportunity and wealth. What America is hiding under its bed are the millions of homeless and poor. Such vast number does not disappear on a moments notice. It takes time, effort, and of course, money. How can we focus on this portion of the American population if we are donating millions of dollars go to African ones?
There are heart warming pictures of children in Uganda wearing half a loin cloth circulating the nation, beckoning the ignorant majority of the American population that people in other countries need their help. That quarter a day could be used serving a better purpose with immediate results by investing on people struggling to survive in America. With a constant shortage of homeless shelters and open heart kitchens, the money used in Uganda could be used to build more of these havens improving for the homeless and poor. The vital boost in morale will get bums off the street and into factories and offices, reducing poverty as well as increasing American economy. America should not invest in a crumbling tower else where, but help fortify America’s pillars.
The famous cliché ‘the children are our future’ is not taken to heart by many Americans. Many people in America have families. It is time to get the realization that homeless people have families as well. Taking care of the homeless doesn’t only represent the bum on the street panning for money. It means taking care of their families as well. Many homeless do not only do it for themselves. Their children may be waiting anxiously for their mother or father to come back with enough money for toast that night. Why worry about those kids? Then why worry so much about some African child over four thousand miles away while the nearest homeless kid lives in the next block? Remember ‘the children are our future’? The future of that homeless child will be a life-long wrestle of misery and will most likely turn into another stereotypical bum on the street or even a criminal.
So should we leave the future of our country to turn into one like a third world country? Or should we invest our quarter in something useful that benefits the ones we really care about, Americans?
The essay is not complete, the conclusion is not complete, it is only a rough draft.
so I'll the flashflash community to proof read my essay
Any comments are welcome (please don't take this too literally)
Any Opinions against or for this topic is also welcome ^.^
the prompt: your view on america
topic: America is not focusing on ourselves therefore starving america of the resources it needs to stay powerful.
title: starving america
To be American is to be powerful, to be free, but also poor? Americans fail to address the problems inside our country, the starving the children, the homeless, the illiterate all need the attention that is spend in other countries. America, the most powerful country in the world, is not focusing the foundation of its glorious power, the American people. We have organizations for Uganda and slave labor in third world countries but what of the needy in our country? They are stuck in the streets and are growing in number annually. America needs to come to its senses; we must invest our time and effort not in the outrageous and pointless wars over in Iraq or problems in other countries but in how we organize and help ourselves.
The first sign that our time and effort was being misplaced was when Americans first realized that their pockets were being emptied. Where do the funds for the machinery, the weapons ,and the soldiers come from? That’s right, from those pockets emptied. As a result the entire nation suffers. Funds from education are sucked dry. Teachers, schools, and students are deprived of adequate learning materials and resources. As shown in a 20/20 episode, Stupid America, schools are not delivering results and other countries, even third world countries, are outstripping Americans in academic achievement. The rationale of going to Iraq was to search for weapons of mass destruction. As it turns out, we brought more weapons into their country and more deaths to Americans and Iraqis alike. America, stop sucking our pockets dry to plant flowers in Iraq and give our people the education we deserve.
Many Americans fail to realize the amount of poverty that occurs in our country. Too often people recognize America as the super country of the world, a perfect nation in terms of opportunity and wealth. What America is hiding under its bed are the millions of homeless and poor. Such vast number does not disappear on a moments notice. It takes time, effort, and of course, money. How can we focus on this portion of the American population if we are donating millions of dollars go to African ones?
There are heart warming pictures of children in Uganda wearing half a loin cloth circulating the nation, beckoning the ignorant majority of the American population that people in other countries need their help. That quarter a day could be used serving a better purpose with immediate results by investing on people struggling to survive in America. With a constant shortage of homeless shelters and open heart kitchens, the money used in Uganda could be used to build more of these havens improving for the homeless and poor. The vital boost in morale will get bums off the street and into factories and offices, reducing poverty as well as increasing American economy. America should not invest in a crumbling tower else where, but help fortify America’s pillars.
The famous cliché ‘the children are our future’ is not taken to heart by many Americans. Many people in America have families. It is time to get the realization that homeless people have families as well. Taking care of the homeless doesn’t only represent the bum on the street panning for money. It means taking care of their families as well. Many homeless do not only do it for themselves. Their children may be waiting anxiously for their mother or father to come back with enough money for toast that night. Why worry about those kids? Then why worry so much about some African child over four thousand miles away while the nearest homeless kid lives in the next block? Remember ‘the children are our future’? The future of that homeless child will be a life-long wrestle of misery and will most likely turn into another stereotypical bum on the street or even a criminal.
So should we leave the future of our country to turn into one like a third world country? Or should we invest our quarter in something useful that benefits the ones we really care about, Americans?
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