Me in a Box

[clessy]

Heres a poem I just wrote. It just how I feel about life.

I walk down the street full of zest and life.
Yet everyone I see is dead
So lost in within the simple thoughts in there head.
So full the world is and yet how empty it is.
In millions I truly stand alone.
Lonly.
Ruined.
Full of Emptyness.

[hydrojakep]

wow.



very gay.

[IAMTHEEVILBEAN]

Shut up greeny....OWNED (not really...)

Anyways, respect his or her effort. I thought it was pretty good. Just because it does not rhyme doesn't mean it isn't any good.

[makaveli121212]

not bad...you could beef it up a little more, but not bad

[aperson]

Uhh, it's not very good at all. Too simple and doesn't expand on its point well, and seems to rely on 'everyone is a clone, I am unique' style cliche without providing an innovative insight to the situation.

[makaveli121212]

exactly it needs to be beefed up

[Master_of_PARANOiA]

OMGZ CLESSY'S TRAPPED IN A BOX... OH THE HUMANITY

[Anticrombie0909]

I have to agree with aperson on this one. The 'I am alone in a world full of hatred/repetition/preps' poems are so cliche that writing them in itself defeats the purpose of the poem.

[makaveli121212]

preps?

[clessy]

Its not that I'm alone its thats there 2 types of people.
Simple and Complexed
Simple people are the ones can truly be happy because there to stupid to realize how sad they could be if understood how bad things really where.
Complexed isnt any set standard and can be so many levels of different things.

I'd say someone who can go to the job everyday thinking that paying there bills is the most important thing in there life is shallow and simple.

[Synthlight]

Paying the bills is very important.. Especially when you have a business, employees, wife, kid, pets, house, car an numerous other types of things. It's sometimes the one with the teenage angst and nothing better to do than sit at home thinking they have figured out the world that really have the closed mind and live in a box.

Just a thought

Cheers,

Synthlight

[clessy]

It's asshole who made bills and laws and all these things. If we werent so raped up in "bettering" ourselves we would of never had all these thing we could get back to enjoying life for how really simple is it. To be complexed is to realize how simple life was ment to be.

[VxDx]

That is the dumbest thing I've ever heard. You wanna go live by a pond for two years and write a book about it, go right ahead. Maybe at least that would get you out into reality more than just sitting in your luxaries and saying how terrible a "better" life is.

[Varia]

Oh man...i'm sorry, but those last comments, Clessy, were for lack of a better word, retarded.

[clessy]

That is the dumbest thing I've ever heard. You wanna go live by a pond for two years and write a book about it, go right ahead. Maybe at least that would get you out into reality more than just sitting in your luxaries and saying how terrible a "better" life is.

If only socity allowed for someone to be able to suvior just living next to a pond. I wouldnt last. I've become to spoiled off of everyday modern convences.