Poetry

[xiron]

Any kind...

Here's one of mine.


To _____ Pt. 3

Emotions, like chains
Always binding, never letting go
I can’t let go

Feelings, like fire
Burn within me, forever
I can’t let go

Tears roll down my face
All the pain, never-ending
I can’t let go

Fear, afraid of losing you
I couldn’t take it if I did
I won’t let go

[Torlock]

RE: Poetry

Dude, Joey posted this awhile back.

[Specforces]

RE: Poetry

Meh, sounds like everything I've heard ever. Try something complicated syntax or something, or use alliteration, that's always fun.

[talisman]

RE: Poetry

emo is not the answer.

try to be less literal.

[Layla-Day]

RE: Poetry

I have one.

Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.

Up above the world so high.
Like a diamond in the sky.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder, What you are.

[jewpinthethird]

Re: RE: Poetry

I have one.

Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.

Up above the world so high.
Like a diamond in the sky.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder, What you are.

I have one too.

It's called "You Are Not Funny"

Xiron, no offense, but your poem is kind of boring.

You say emotions are like chains that never let go, but eventually chains weaken and break, fires get extinquished, pain becomes numb, etc.

Honestly, when read your poem, I pictured a drunk, sweaty, fat guy with long hair reciting this poem to a lifesize cardboard cut out of Lora Croft in his parent's basement.

I mean, it's great that you are into writing poetry and whatnot, but it wouldnt hurt to read some love sonnets and get some inspiriation.

[alainbryden]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

I wrote this the year before last for an online friend who needed help on a chemistry assignment.

Copper!

Oh Copper oh copper,
Element 29,
Conducts electricity
Better then water and wine.

Discovered 5000 years ago,
And ever since used,
You purify water,
When with a sulphate fused.

Analytical chemists
Detect sugar with thee,
The ultimate conductor
Of electricity and heat.

Were it not
For this copper today,
The electrical industry
Would wither away.

So whenever using
Your coins or twine,
Remember the faithful
Element 29.

[alainbryden]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

I also made this in grade 8 after reading MacBeth

Macbeth: for people who hate books

Macbeth was a man quite ambitious,
Whose greed made him act very vicious.
He took the real kings life
With a very big knife,
The result was a banquet delicious.

King Macbeth soon felt less like a man.
His wife went mad and kicked the can.
Soon, Macbeth is convicted,
And as the witches predicted,
Macdough killed Macbeth as he’d planned.

[alainbryden]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

and this is from my emo days. frown.

Evitcurtsed

Fear, Face, Drear, Place
Lost, Tired, Bossed, Wired
Give me pity; cause me depression
Give me love; cause an obsession
Give me one rule; cause felt oppression
Give me some space; commence regression
Gone, Near, Borne, Leer
Take, Need, Fake, Bleed
Give me a chance; my bad impression
Give me some time; need an extension
Give me a hand; ruin the intention
Give me a choice; fail in succession
From, Taken, For, Gotten
Test, Jailed, Death, Failed…

[Moogy]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

emo

[whazzabie]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

Los Dudes, real poetry is in rap. your little poems of ur fantasies are ok but rap keeps it real.

[alainbryden]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

The N00b

Oh god.
The lack of grammar.
The lack of intelligence.
The substitution of "ur" for "your".
The post count.
The n00bness.
My eyes.
Burning.
GTFO

[flypie743]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

I wrote this myself :>

A BEAR DARED A MOOSE TO WEAR
A BIG WHITE COAT WITH A TEAR
THE MARE DARED BEAR
TO SEARCH FOR A PIECE OF HORSES' HAIR
AN EARNEST SQUIRREL YEARNED TO DARE THE MARE
EVERYONE KNEW THE MARE WAS A SELFISH MARE
SO THE SQUIRREL DARED THE MARE
TO LEARN HOW TO SHARE

[iPatcH]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

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[Moogy]

RE: Re: RE: Poetry

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i call it the numbers poem