First Custom Song

[ssbmchamp]

Just looking for any way I can to get my material out there as an artist. It's rap but it's inspirational rap, not hardcore ganster rap. Anyway I'd appreciate any feedback just to get a general idea of what people think. I don't mind criticism but if you're gonna simply post "I don't like rap," then don't bother posting because that does nothing in terms of feedback.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature...v=zt2WWIitNNc#!

[Xiz]

Re: First Custom Song

The youtube picture really downgrades the song to me. Just listening to the music I really really enjoy it (and im not a fan of rap that much)

It's a bit out of tune in places - but you know what elements you need to make a song work. Keep it up.

[yo man im awesome]

Re: First Custom Song

I haven't listened to rap in a decent while; but this was pretty good to be honest.

Like Xiz said, there a few places out of tune. The chorus specifically seemed a bit flat to me. around 1:35 (that whole section) to me it sounded like you were falling behind.

Also I don't like how you said castle

Overall pretty good though, is definitely better than I can do.

(P.S. I don't like the youtube picture either, it looks like you took MS Paint or Smart Notebook and spent like 10 minutes tops on it)

[ssbmchamp]

Re: First Custom Song

I haven't listened to rap in a decent while; but this was pretty good to be honest.

Like Xiz said, there a few places out of tune. The chorus specifically seemed a bit flat to me. around 1:35 (that whole section) to me it sounded like you were falling behind.

Also I don't like how you said castle

Overall pretty good though, is definitely better than I can do.

(P.S. I don't like the youtube picture either, it looks like you took MS Paint or Smart Notebook and spent like 10 minutes tops on it)

Lol yeah I agree with you guys, there we're some places out of tune. I guess I was focused primarily on the lyrics for a meaningfuil song and not so much the syncing since most rap songs nowadays have terrible, meaningless lyrics. Not to mention it was one of my first times recording lol. But I appreciate the feedback and hopefully future songs will have a higher quality. Also, I just found that picture online, just wanted to have something rather than a blank page. I have a couple other collaborrated songs on my page if you haven't already checked them out, maybe you would enjoy those also

[Frank Munoz]

Re: First Custom Song

Get a soundcloud~ thatwayyoudon'thavetomakesillygfx andyoucanfollowmusiciansfromFFRonthere
or newgrounds. people seem to like that too.

Really nice though; I look forward to hearing more.
The cutoffs were weird though, and didn't flow 'well'.

Again, good job!

If this is too much to ask, feel free to say no, would you mind providing the vocals? So I and or others may practice our composing and production skills? and if it turns out good we could show it publicly(with your permission ofcourse).