Never Dying Forest
Posted on: November 8, 2011, at 11:03:49pm

Our life is like a tree, we are very much alive and very beautiful.
Our leaves are green and our flowers will soon be bloomed in the spring.
The flowers with so many different colors, representing our different personalities.
Together we create something unique.

Our lifetime is like a trees life in a year, they come back alive in the Spring,
As so are we born into this world.
The world is like a forest, we are all our own trees.
We create the earth as so do trees create a forest.

Our lifetime is like the trees life in a year, for trees shine the most in the middle of the year, yet leaves have fallen for Fall is coming,
As so do we shine in our middle age with our successful lives, but our pain come out as well.
The world is like a forest, we gather together to enjoy each others company.
Every tree showing their uniqueness with no shame.

Our lifetime is like the trees life in a year, for trees go to sleep in the Winter, with their leaves all gone,
As so are we slowly dying in our old age.
The world is like a forest, without the trees there is no forest.
Without us, there is no earth.

The future people's lifetime is like the trees life in a year, the trees come back to life.
And with that, our earth is never dying.
Our future world is like a forest, they are made up of so many years,
As so are we full of many generations...

-Angel
11/8/11

1. 1: sikavonangel
   Posted at 11:20pm on November 8th, 2011

   XD I don't know if that makes sense lol. I just came up with it. XD It sucks in my opinion because I wrote this in like 15-20min. But hope you like it, I guess.
2. 2: Whitelist
   Posted at 11:35pm on November 8th, 2011

   Hm... not a bad poem, but of course there are still flaw. Here is the one that catched my attention the most "As so are we" or "As so do we". Are you asking a question or emphasizing as a sentence? the words "are we" or "do we" is a sign which indicates a question. For example, are we about to die sooner or later? Also the word "As so" is superfluous, which means it is additional. Even if you place those words in the poem, it still would be a question. Here is another example, "'As so are we' about to create the promise land?" I apologize if in anyway, I am being "mean" or a "jerk" or disrespectful, but if it involves poetry, I like to express my thoughts into it.
3. 3: the #1 umbreon
   Posted at 6:06pm on November 9th, 2011

   i noticed that took choco, and i like it angle, imma call u that now, k? ok :p