for the girl i love

[ShAiOnEi]

Re: for the girl i love

There were only three.

Lmao! I suppose I did add one more to be overly dramatic about it.

[GuidoHunter]

Re: for the girl i love

I've seen much worse. You had a couple of good lines in there, but they suffer from serious language problems.

--Guido

http://andy.mikee385.com

[businessman07]

Re: for the girl i love

remember that time,
the first day we met?
our eyes cought eachother & since then I've been sick.

sick without you that is,
cause you didn't see,
my eyes caught a Goddess, you eyes caught a flea.

A flea in the sence,
that I was so small,
you eyes straight though me, as if I wasnt there at all,

that whole year you Ignored me,
except that one time,
when you were short 10 cents and asked for a dime,

but now I am sorry,
for you that is,
for you have missed out on this wonderful kid,

I have worked hard,
the summer I've slaved
and the fruit of my labor? A body unscathed,

today you said Hi,
I guess you thought I was cute,
I didn't bother to look & my mouth remained mute,

for I know your type,
I know what you want,
all body, no mind, WELL YOU GET WHAT YOU FLAUNT.

[LLaMaSaUceYup]

Re: for the girl i love

Haha that poem was interesting... ^^^

[mead1]

Re: for the girl i love

I think someone has ignored the fact that I have just stolen his girlfriend.

[SaSSyBiiTcH]

Re: for the girl i love

moosh.
but im a moosh lover.
If it's from the heart thats all that matters.
Nicely done.

[ejthedj00]

Re: for the girl i love

ROFL! so this is what happens when i just randomly view a thred! wow, well i people =]

[All_That_Chaz]

Re: for the girl i love

Your words leave the mind limp
And longing, for any chimp
Can say, “I love you” in dis-
Jointed free verse. Even this
Is completely improvised and
Uses the joys of emjamb-
Ment to replace your
Preachy lecture with a free-flowing fjord
Of words that are not controlled
By lines but instead hold
The idea you wanted in the first place
When you fell in love with little what's-her-face.
Oh, one last thing before I’m done –
Speak ill of Shasta and I’ll rip out your tongue.

[burningeyes88]

Re: for the girl i love

alotta posts sense i went to bed. oh and to shasta i didnt want praise im just the type of person who feels the need to annoy everyone else with their stupid emotions.

also

I think someone has ignored the fact that I have just stolen his girlfriend.

no ive just been ignoring the fact that your a retard

[MrRubix]

Re: for the girl i love

Hey give the kid a break, he's young. Every poet has their phases.

Long way to go... but eh, you gotta start somewhere.

[burningeyes88]

Re: for the girl i love

i guess my emo poems were better

[All_That_Chaz]

Re: for the girl i love

rubix, he called shasta a bitch after she was nice enough to call this poetry mediocre. plus im bored.

[MrRubix]

Re: for the girl i love

Oh, I didn't see that.

In that case, grow a pair, kid.

[burningeyes88]

Re: for the girl i love

yes modiocre is just what i wanted to hear

and **** you rubix you fake

[Sir_Thomas]

Re: for the girl i love

This is about to get ****ing hilarious.