My First Manga

[Chromer]

Ok This was something I did during Japanese 1. The drawing isn't my best because I didn't have much time to do it. Still check it out. It's called
"Watermelon Fight."

[Omeganitros]

RE: My First Manga

=O

Good, good.

Just work on the storyline and humor.

[Spazzbite]

RE: My First Manga

I like the flame effect.

PS: In frame 7, you wrote his name as "Shindji" instead of "Shinji". Ji is Shi with ten ten.

[Chromer]

RE: My First Manga

Actually I referenced Shinji from my Japanese textbook I use in school and it said Ji was Chi with ten ten. Unless the Japanese are idiots
or the Americans misprinted, I'm not sure.

[Draigun]

I'm completely sure Ji is Shi with ten-ten... <3 for another Japanese 1 student..Though since we have block scheduleing, I'll be taking Japanese 2 after Christmas break.

That looks great, though..

[jewpinthethird]

I'm completely sure Ji is Shi with ten-ten

You are completely correct.

Also, it is written as Ichi in romaji.

[Chromer]

Do I smell weekly Manga strip? All in favor say yay! or Nay!

[MonkeyFoo]

no writing here...

[IceX]

nice style ya got there

[IAMTHEEVILBEAN]

Next time use a ruler and better writing and it might be good.

[jewpinthethird]

I cant tell which character is which...try mixing up their hair styles a bit...or something. Or give one an eye-patch.

[Kenzya]

I went all the way to the corner to start reading and I was dissapointed

[MonkeyFoo]

Next time, do it outside of class, maybe try some color, and set it up so that it is skinny
to fit on the webpage without scrolling sideways. For a final suggestion: use hair that
sticks up or out more. Then, use more intriguing plot. watermelons can't hold the
attention of most people.

[Chromer]

Wow. I seriously don't need to hear anything from you, considering you just joined a few months ago.

[Porgy]

i joined 7 days before you, can i say it sucks?

actually you just need to put more effort into your drawings. And storyline. And concept.