something i came up with..(Just Like a Story Book)
Posted on: November 7, 2011, at 10:28:36am

interpersonal turning internal,
escalatin over my head,
becomin somethin all regretted.
lord knows I've tried,
to make these things flow right by
but lately its been to much,
these conflicts are tearin me apart,
putting me back to start.



Oh all this confliction,
is messin up my intuition,
I just wanna clear this up,
and live in peace and harmony,
Just like in a story book.



i know whats triggerin,
all this affliction that I've been in,
unexplored emotions and unexplained commotions,
my sanity is the thing at stake,
personal values and beliefs,
lay burning in my wake,
my question now is,
should i fight or flight?
these are things that wake me,
durin my conflicted sleepin.



Oh all this confliction,
is messen up my intuition,
I just wanna clear this up,
and live in peace and harmony,
Just like in a story book.



this misfortune and misery goes on and on,
and I've tried so hard,
but now it's over now,
cause no matter what,
I'm gone.



Oh all this confliction,
is messen up my intuition,
I just wanna clear this up,
and live in peace and harmony,
Just like in a story book.




This is me pleadin,
for some freedom,
From this hellish world,
we live in.

1. 1: blaster824
   Posted at 10:48am on November 7th, 2011

   i like trains :3
2. 2: Whitelist
   Posted at 2:50pm on November 7th, 2011

   Hm... the only thing I don't like about your poem (if it is a poetry) is that you used the word "shit". I'm sure there are other words that can replace the word "shit" such as misfortune, anxiety, affliction, misery, and many other words that could be used. Then again, it is your poem, so I absolutely have no right to critique about it, accept giving my opinion or advice whether it is unnecessary or necessary. In conclusion, it's a good poem, overall.
3. 3: Missdeltona07
   Posted at 4:36pm on November 7th, 2011

   U sound depressed hon :O
4. 4: the #1 umbreon
   Posted at 5:12pm on November 7th, 2011

   lols i wrote this for no good reason, this was a rough draft for a song i randomly came up with DX and white ik i was mad and depressed and i was hyper and all excited so i wrote stuff that prob doesnt go well in there, imma edit and post the song i came up with, and plz dont tell me it sucks ass cause i already know it does
5. 5: Whitelist
   Posted at 5:26pm on November 7th, 2011

   Recorrecting: accept to *Except*
   I see... and I don't think it "sucks ass", I mean there may be flaw and errors, but this one is nicely written out, especially if you were to do it right off without thinking anything much.
6. 6: the #1 umbreon
   Posted at 5:42pm on November 7th, 2011

   thank you :p